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Kdestiny
01-30-2003, 07:56 AM
A darkened room
distant souls scream;
then silence.
Where are the screams,
the people --
suddenly, "alone" holds new power.

Fly to the edge of the earth
stare out into the cluttered nothingness
and wonder,
is it time. . .
give in & I'm weak,
fight & I'm horrible, mean, cruel. . .

So how do I want to be hated;
for what I do to escape,
or for what I'm doing to survive?

My head aches
even more than my heart;
my spirit lies broken,
& my will -- gone!

Don't pity me,
I'll be just fine.
I always am!

manifold
01-30-2003, 09:11 AM
:hugon KD :hugoff

this is so incredibly sad, yet so incredibly powerful

what a complete statement on the power of the mind to be caught in such a state of anguish yet hide under the convention of being "fine" because it is socially acceptable and less threatening to anyone else

u also articulate very well, whether what we do to ourselves is a measure of escapism or survival. That one is going to make me think for a while

Thanks for sharing. Maybe my reading of your poem isn't what you intended but i hear the sadness and the pain regardless

Keep posting stuff like this hon, you are very eloquent and expressive

:love mani

Kdestiny
01-31-2003, 08:03 AM
Thank you so much for reading my poem hun. To be honest I don't really know how I feel about it yet.

Actually you saw a side of the poem that I hadn't thought of - I'd meant to express how it becomes a struggle between choosing to die and having the world hate that decision, or choosing survival and being hated for the desperate actions taken to survive, but to be honest I like your view much better. :happy But you're absolutely right on the money with the "fine" thing. It's a word I hate, and one that I will absolutely use for the rest of my life if things continue as they are.

Again, thank you so much - it means more to me than you could possibly know that you took the time to read and reply to this. It's nice to have someone out there who's interested in what I do!

I love you,
Tara